two kids

Once upon a time, there lived a boy and his younger sister.

One night, their evil parents left them in a forest, and the boy and sister wandered about hand in hand because they were just kids and didn’t know how to get back home.

They came upon a house made of chocolate and candy and were lured inside because they were just kids and hungry and locked up by a witch who lived in it.

But, they were smart kids. They outwitted the poor old witch, shoved her into the oven and baked her at 450˚ Fahrenheit.

They took the witch’s treasure because they were just kids and didn’t know stealing was a felony and lived happily ever after until they grew up and weren’t kids anymore.

(128 words)

 

photo prompt provided by TJ Paris

For Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers – week of August 16, 2016 and The Daily Post’s daily prompt, Youth

 

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24 Comments Add yours

  1. Iain Kelly says:

    Nice modern fairytale!

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  2. Hahahaha! Cute fairytale! They cooked the witch! LOL!

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  3. jademwong says:

    Whoa! What a twist on a classic fairytale! Nicely done 🙂

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    1. nelkumi says:

      Thank you! 😊

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  4. Sahana says:

    Hansel and Gretel’s modern version! COOOOL!!!

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  5. those weren’t kids they were 21 st century tecno-savy five year old human beings! kids became extinct years ago 🙂 Anton

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  6. This reminds me of the Grimms brothers Hansel and Gretel. It serves the witch right.

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    1. nelkumi says:

      The photo prompt made me think of the house in the tale. Thank you for the visit and comments.

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  7. mySestina says:

    Loved it.. I could feel the irony towards the end. They lived happily until they weren’t kids anymore..

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    1. nelkumi says:

      Glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for the visit and comment.

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      1. mySestina says:

        Your welcome..

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  8. draliman says:

    I love the way you wrote this – it reads like such a sweet innocent story despite the abandonment, kidnapping, murder and theft 🙂

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    1. nelkumi says:

      Thank you for the visit and comment. 😊

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  9. sahirmunjral says:

    Really nice and truly short. You are good. I am a 10 year old boy, also trying to write short stories. Just started my blog on short stories. Come and read my first story on http://shortstories4kids.wordpress.com . And tell me what u think.

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    1. nelkumi says:

      Good luck with your stories and blog. Thank you for the visit.

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  10. rgayer55 says:

    I wonder how long it takes to bake a witch at 450F? I bet she was tough and stringy. I’ve always heard that about witches.

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    1. nelkumi says:

      gamy … I heard.😉

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  11. Anju says:

    hehehehehe my son is saying the real story is bit different mommy.. (he is 6)
    now he is telling me the real story hehehehehe

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