progress

She is walking; fast-paced, focused, and fixated on the voice on the phone.
She gives a few instructions, finishes the conversation, and hangs up, still walking. She is oblivious, yet cautious, to the passersby, stores, eateries, and streets. She is in a hurry, has places to go and people to meet. She wears only the best and most comfortable, ensconcing her well-taken-care-of, eat-healthy, work-out-regularly body.
She has built her empire; her perfect family, her prestigious career, and associates. She works hard, sleeps less, and, perhaps, misses more than gains. Once soaring and grand her life was, though, she now cannot help noticing the deteriorations.

“Is it in gradual decay?”

It feels as if the whole thing is crumbling; her energy is not as much into anything, she often stares at the tired old self in a mirror, people around her talk about things that she no longer understands.

“What can I save before it collapses completely? Reputation? Family? Friendship? Faith? Myself?”

She wonders, still walking.

 

(172 words)

photo prompt copyright Al Forbes

For Sunday Photo Fiction – October 2nd 2016

 

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22 Comments Add yours

  1. Iain Kelly says:

    Great take on the prompt.

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  2. tagnoue says:

    I love this rapid continuous beat of words.

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    1. nelkumi says:

      Aww, I’m so glad you enjoyed!

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  3. andysmerdon says:

    I agree with ‘Tagnoue’ – I can almost hear her high heel shoes clipping along the pavement 🙂 – and maybe faltering for just a moment

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    1. nelkumi says:

      Phew… so happy to know it resonates. 😊

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      1. andysmerdon says:

        it does indeed 🙂

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      2. nelkumi says:

        Thank you for the assurance! 😆

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  4. Dahlia says:

    I loved this take on the prompt and very well written too.

    Like

    1. nelkumi says:

      Glad you like it. Thank you for the visit and comment.

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  5. swritings says:

    Great take! 🙂

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  6. mandibelle16 says:

    Love how the building is representative of her and her life choices. Great take!

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    1. nelkumi says:

      Thank you so much!

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  7. Very good. I do like how you used the prompt, as a metaphor rather than a reality. Well done Nelkumi.

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  8. The state of mind, on-goings and the picture, very well correlated. It was a nice read.. 🙂

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    1. nelkumi says:

      Thank you kindly.

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  9. rogershipp says:

    Great metaphor! Well done!

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  10. Oh I really loved this.
    Intense!

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    1. nelkumi says:

      Glad you like it!

      Like

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